My views on the book have changed since this video and it is actually one of my favorite books now. However, I still think my criticisms on the first chapter were justified and think we can all use it as an example of what not to do. First off, make sure the words you're using actually mean what you think they mean and secondly, remember that describing the setting should be a good way to help the reader better visualize the scene and help explain and complement dialogue, not the other way around. It's good we learned about the island but the descriptions given in the other chapters are much more important and make things easy to understand and visualize compared to the long descriptions in the first chapter that, for the most part, you forget about. It's also a good example of how too much info dumping can overwhelm the reader and make it unenjoyable to read. Don't give them all the information at once, give it when it is most important to the story, making your book flow well and making it easier to understand. You don't want to spoon feed your audience but if you are going to go into detail about the scenery, character information, etc. do it when it's most important rather than dumping it all on the reader at once. But... that's just some writing advice from me. Regardless, I hope you enjoyed my first impressions of Lord of The Flies.
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